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To the Peeping Tom
Somewhere in the flora
light flicks
out and in
upon two mantids
The male
tells you:
When you let self-
preservation go
let even your knuckles
and the webbing
between your fingers go
you will learn what love is
You marvel
their claws
clamping claws
the pelvic thrum
his keen bow
and the woman
slipping his meat
into her jaw
Somewhere in the flora
light flicks
out and in
upon two mantids
The male
tells you:
When you let self-
preservation go
let even your knuckles
and the webbing
between your fingers go
you will learn what love is
You marvel
their claws
clamping claws
the pelvic thrum
his keen bow
and the woman
slipping his meat
into her jaw
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the only part where i am unclear is the third and fourth stanzas -
stanza three gives me sort of the impression that the male is being seductive... then in stanza four where you talk about fingers it makes them human all of a sudden. i think you may be trying to give the poem two meanings in a way there, but it disrupts the imagery in my mind...but it's ok anyway...
Overall I like it
stanza three gives me sort of the impression that the male is being seductive... then in stanza four where you talk about fingers it makes them human all of a sudden. i think you may be trying to give the poem two meanings in a way there, but it disrupts the imagery in my mind...but it's ok anyway...
Overall I like it